第1页共19页2011年6月英语四级考试真题详细解析PartIWriting标准版DoingShoppingOnlineWiththedevelopmentoftheInternet,shoppingisnolongeratiringthing.Justclickyourmousetochoosethearticlesyoulike,andthepurchaseisdone.Youdon'tevenhavetostepoutoftheroom.Itseemsalleasyandquick.However,people'sopinionsvaryonthistrend.Somebelievethatonlineshoppingistimeandmoneysaving.Withplentifulselectionoptions,theycanbuywhatevertheylikeatanytimeconvenient.Stillothersinsistthatmis-purchasingaloneisannoyingenough,nottomentionthecredibilityofthesellersandthesafetyoftheiraccounts.Inmyopinion,theconvenienceandexcitementofonlineshoppingisbeyondalldoubts.Inthemeantime,wemustalwaysbearinmindthatcertaintrapsdoexist,sowe'dbettermakesurethesellersaretrustworthybeforebuying.Inaddition,weshouldalsoguardourselvesfromthepotentialhackerswhomightstealouraccountinformation.文章点评：这是一篇“中等偏上”的学生作文。本文先对网购热潮进行简介，引出全篇；接着对网络购物的正反两方面进行对比；最后提出自己的看法结束全篇。整体看思路清晰，逻辑严密，行文流畅，用语较为地道。下面说一下这篇文章的有待提高之处：1.文章结构上，能看得出该同学试图采用议论文的“三段式”（提出问题、分析问题、解决问题）。但是，以“WiththedevelopmentoftheInternet”为开首语，有些落入俗套，有硬套模板的嫌疑。稍加注意，应该能写出更好的句子。2.微观语言点方面，有些语句稍显啰嗦，比如Withplentifulselectionoptions…简化成Withplentifulselections…更好，意思没有丝毫减损，表达力反而增强许多。高分版Withthehelpoftheeverrapiddevelopmentofinternettechnology,onlineshoppingiscomingintofashioninmostofcities.Onlineshoppingiswelcomedbymostpeopleduetovariousreasons.Fromtheperspectiveofconsumer,itcansavesometimeforpeoplewhodon'thavemuchsparetime.Justclickthemouse,theycangetwhatevertheywantwhilestayingathome.Fortheretailers,itcancutsomecostsforthosewhodon'thavemuchcirculatingfunds.Theydon'thavetorentahouseandspendmoneyonemployeescomparedwiththetraditionaltrademode.However,therearestillsomedefectsinonlineshopping.First,laceoffacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppinglessreliablean...
