第一篇：英语作文点评

新东方英语手机报——大千世界触“手”可及，精彩英语尽在“掌”握！

钱琦来自哈工大附中，2011年她以118分的高分成为哈市中考语文第一名，她的语文作文得了50分的满分。作为本次名师公益大讲堂的嘉宾，钱琦告诉在场的同学们，写作文，不追求华丽的辞藻，追求深刻性。

重在表达内心感受

钱琦说：“写作文重在表达内心的感受，让人从文字的背后看到你的心灵，看到你心里想什么，文章不仅要感染别人，还要让人理解文章要传达到意思，让人感到深刻。”

钱琦对即将上初四的学生说：“你们还有一年时间，可以从现在开始培养对文字的感觉，从阅读开始，观察生活，写作不追求华丽的辞藻，追求深刻性。”

不能华丽辞藻堆砌

“我相信‘读书破万卷，下笔如有神’，因此喜欢阅读，尤其喜欢阅读那些有思想有哲理的书，比如《人生哲学》和《苏菲的世界》。如果觉得没看懂，可以多看几遍。”钱琦说，她在初四的上学期喜欢用华丽辞藻来堆积文章。“我写过一篇作文叫《生活的诗意》，语文老师仅给了38分，评语一共4个字：‘诗意何在’。这对我的打击很大，我主动找到了老师。老师说，你写的作文特别空洞，不知道在表达什么。我一下子就明白了，那些华丽的辞藻、排比句，无法表达自己的真实感受。”

第二篇：中考英语作文范例+点评

中考英语作文范例：我们的住宅小区

Our Housing Estate 我们的小区

There are many nice housing estates in Pudong New Area.Our housing Rainbow Estate, is one of them.浦东新区有很多漂亮的小区，我们的小区——彩虹小区，是其中之一。

You can see three in the middle.There is a beautiful garden in front of Block 2.In the gardon there is a.There is a shop on the right of Block 1.A big playground lies on the left of Block 3.You can see many men, women, boys and girls having exercise there.小区中间有三条街道。在第二条街道前面是一个美丽的花园，花园里有个喷泉。在第一条街道的右面是一个商店，而第三街道的左边是一个巨大的运动场，可以看到男男女女在那边做运动。

There is a small in our housing estate.It is and comfortable for us to live in our housing estate.在我们的小区有一个小小的幼儿园。对于我们来说，住在小区十分方便和舒服。点评：文章的结构与布局较合理，有一定的顺序，层次分明。

中考英语作文范例：我们的语音室

编辑点评：中考英语作文的另一种类型是说明文。说明文是就某一件事说明清楚，一般总是以空间顺序展开的。写物的文章常用“某处有某物”的句子表示物的存在。

说明文是就某一件事说明清楚，一般总是以空间顺序展开的，可以自上而下，自左而右，从里到外，从整体到局部等等。写物的文章常用“某处有某物”的句子表示物的存在。常用的句型如： There be...I have got a/ an...It is red/ green/ colour/ round...I like...best.It looks like...I like it very much.I will keep it forever.Our Language Lab 我们的语音室

There is a language in our school.It's on the third floor.It's big and clean.我们学校有一个语音室，它位于三楼，大而整洁。

There are 50 desks and 50 chairs in it.There are 50 computers and a in it.There are 50 s on the desk.语音室里有50张桌椅，50台电脑和一个操纵台，桌子上还放着50副耳机。

Every week we have our English lessons here.We watch , TV, video and listen to tapes.Then the teacher asks us questions.We like our language lab and always keep it clean and tidy.我们每周都会在这儿上英语课，我们在这里看幻灯片，电视，视频和听磁带。然后老师会向我们提问。我们很喜欢这个语音室，并且总是保持它的干净整洁。

点评：这篇文章写了“我们的语音室”,按照一定的空间顺序，先写设备，再写功能，让人对语音室的概貌有一个全面，准确的了解。

中考英语作文范例：温泉让我得到休息

编辑点评：中考英语作文叙事文章要拿高分，除了要说清楚整件事情的来龙去脉，更关键的是要说得生动有趣，让评卷人获得情感上的共鸣。我们仔细观察下今天的作文范例是如何做到这一点的吧。

Hot spring Let Me Have A Rest 温泉让我得到休息

We took off our coats and ran quickly into the spring.When I first put my feet into the water.I cried out, “Wow, it is hot!” I didn't know the water was so hot, and I was a little that it would burn me...So I walked carefully into the spring.One step,two...I felt the heat slowly ing up my body.我们脱下外套，快速奔向柠檬泉，当我第一次把脚伸进水中时，我大声喊道：“哇，水是热的！”我一开始不知道水如此热，所以我有点儿担心会被热水烫到。于是，我小心翼翼地走进温泉，一步，两步......我能感觉到热量慢慢地进入我的身体。

点评：要写出生动有趣的事，除了把事情的来龙去脉说清楚，还一定要注意增加文章的细节，这是必不可少的，丰富的细节描写能为你的文章增色不少，使人读起来具有一种身临其境的感觉。另外，本篇时态运用十分得当，整篇文章的动词过去时一脉相承。

中考英语作文范例：我最好的朋友

编辑点评：中考最后一大版块通常是作文(也称写话)，今天我们来看看记叙文中描写人的一个范例。描写人的方面有很多，介绍姓名、年龄、职业、兴趣爱好、外貌、特长等，我们看看这篇文章注重的是哪一方面。My Best Friend 我最好的朋友

My best friend is one of my s.Her name is.Every day, we go to school together and go back home together.We often help each other and learn from each other in study.我最好的朋友是我的一个同班同学，她的名字叫玛丽。我们每天一起上学，一起回家。我们经常互相帮助，并向对方学习。

We have the same-ing s.She has many nice stamps.She is very proud of them.Sometimes she gives some of them to me.I think she is a very good girl.We will be good friends forever.我们有着相同的爱好——集邮。她有很多漂亮的邮票，并为此十分自豪。有时，她会把其中的一些邮票给我。我认为她是个非常好的女孩。我们会成为永远的朋友。

点评：这是一篇记人的叙述文。先交代了My Best Friend是谁，接着通过事例交代了为什么“我们是最好的朋友”。最后阐述了主题。

中考英语作文范例：我的班主任

编辑点评：记叙文是中考作文的一个主要题型，它的写作要求是重点突出，用词得当，60词左右，我们来看看今天这篇描述老师的文章是怎么写的吧，另外还有常用句型奉上哦。

My Class Teacher 我的班主任

My class teacher is Mr.Wang.He is but kind.He has taught us Chinese for two years.我的班主任是王老师，他是一个要求严格而亲切的老师。他已经教了我们两年语文。He always tells us to study hard but not all the time.Sometimes he plays with us.He says, “All work and no play makes Jack a boy.” I think he is a good.他总是告诉我们要好好学习，但不是时时刻刻学习。有时他会和我们一起玩。他说：“只会用功不玩耍，聪明孩子也变傻。”

我觉得他是个很好的班主任。

点评：这篇文章取材的是身边熟悉的人，作者也有东西可写，更具有可读性。另外，写人时把主语稍作调整，读起来轻松多了。

I am a 15-year-old girl.My name is.Now I am studying in the middle school.I want to be an because I think it is a funny and exciting job...写人的常见句式如： This is my friend, Mary.She is...years old.She is a teacher/ an artist/ a singer...She/ He gets up at 6/5.../ early/ late.She/ He has sports at school.She/ He likes...She/ He is strong/ fat/ / kind/ thin/...She/ He looks like...She/ He is good at English/ maths/ Chinese/ physics...中考英语作文范例：我的班会

编辑点评：前面介绍了写人的作文，今天，我们看看叙事的作文又是怎样的呢。写事一定要交代时间、地点、人物、情节，这跟语文中的记叙文其实是相通的。先来观察下面这篇范文吧。Our Class Meeting 我们的班会

Last Friday afternoon we had our last class meeting in our classroom.All the students and our class teacher took part in it.上周五下午，我们在教室举行了最后一次班会。班上的所有同学和班主任都参加了。We held a warm about our future life.Each of us spoke at the meeting.After the discussion, we all to study hard so as to make our life better and better.我们热烈讨论了今后的生活，每个人都在会上积极发言。讨论完后我们都下定决心好好学习，让我们的生活更加美好。

点评：这篇文章条理清楚，记叙完整，短短的五句话有简单句，也有复合句，交代了时间、地点、人物、原因、经过、结果六要素。常用的叙事句型有：

It took place/ happened...Last week/ year/ Monday/ Tuesday...One Friday morning...中考英语作文范例：树为什么重要

编辑点评：今天我们来看看议论文的写法吧。议论文要有自己的观点，要有论证过程，强调观点。先来读一读这篇范文吧。Why Are Trees Important 树为什么重要

Trees are very important to us.Do you know why? Let me tell you.树对于我们非常重要，你知道为什么吗？让我来告诉你吧。

Trees take in from the air and make.That's important.People and animals need oxygen to live.Many small animals and s live in the trees.Some of them also get food from trees.Trees can also stop water and from going away.If we have a lot of trees, we stop s from being large.I think this is very important.You know, trees are green.They can make our country even more beautuful.树木可以吸收二氧化碳，并释放氧气，这非常重要。人类和动物需要依靠氧气生存。很多小动物和昆虫居住在树里，有些从树里获取食物。树木还可以防止水土流失。如果我们有很多树就可以阻止沙漠扩大。我认为这非常重要。众所周知，树是绿色的，它们能使我们的国家更加美丽。

Trees are our good friends.We should plant more trees and take good care of them.树是我们的好朋友。我们应该种更多的树，并好好照料它们。点评：文章先阐明观点，接着论证，最后重申自己的观点。

中考英语作文范例：英语回信

编辑点评：写信是为了交流，有来信，必然也会有回信。在上期，我们介绍了英文书信的写法，今天我们来看看回信在格式和内容方面又要注意哪些问题呢。

Dear Bob, 亲爱的鲍勃，Yesterday I heard from you.I am very glad to be your pen friend.My name is Peter Zhang.I am sixteen years old.I live in...昨天我收到了你的来信，我很高兴成为你的笔友。我的名字叫张彼德。我今年十六岁，我住在......I am a middle school student, too.I like English and maths very much.I also like sports.I am good at singing.I know a little about America.Could you tell me something more about your country in your next letter? 我也是一名中学生，我非常喜欢英语和数学。我还喜欢体育运动，我很擅长唱歌。我对美国的了解不多，下次来信时能多跟我聊聊你们国家的事吗？ Please write to me soon.期待着你的来信。Yours 你的

Peter Zhang 张彼德

点评：回信简洁明了，句子间的衔接自然、紧凑，文中作者把自己的情况大致向美国朋友作了介绍，达到了回信的目的。

中考英语作文范例：通知的翻译

编辑点评：看完了书信的写作，接下来该说说便条的写作了。其实便条的用处还是挺大的，请假要请假条，留言要留言条，备忘也要有个备忘录，今天的作文范例就是关于一则“观众须知”的英文便条解释。

假如你陪你校的外籍教师Smith先生去音乐厅听音乐，在门口的布告栏里看见一张观众须知，内容如下： 观众须知

1、一人一票，凭票入场；

2、场内严禁吸烟；

3、食品和饮料请勿带进场内；

4、演出时请勿照相；

5、演出时请勿使用传呼机和移动电话；

6、提前30分钟入场。

Smith先生不懂中文，他很想知道布告栏里写着什么。现在，请你把观众须知的内容用英语告诉Smith先生，并把要讲的话写出来。

Mr.Smith, it is a notice to the.It says that we should enter the concert hall 30 minutes earlier before the concert starts.to the hall is by ticket only, each one each ticket.史密斯先生，这是一则观众须知。上面说我们应该在音乐会开始前30分钟入场，每人凭票进入。

As a rule, food or drink should not be taken into the hall.Of course, smoking is not allowed in the hall either.按照规定，食品和饮料不得带进场内，吸烟也是不允许的。

Please don't bring your with you because no photos can be taken during the concert.And what is more, and mobile phones must be off during the concert.请不要携带数码相机入内，因为场内严禁拍照。另外，音乐会期间，传呼机和手机必须关闭。点评：文章的用词和句式有一定的难度，特别是关联词的运用，如of course，as a rule，and what is more使文章读起来朗朗上口，层层紧扣，环环递进，体现了作者较高的写作技巧和水平。

中考英语作文范例：节约用水

编辑点评：节约用水是保护环境的重要一步，因此也是一个常谈的话题，如何在中考作文几十个单词的范围内把这个主题写好是，是一个值得下功夫思考的问题，我们看看这篇范文是如何做到的。Saving Water What do we use water for? 2 Why water is very important in our daily life? 3 How do we save water? 参考范文

As we all know, water is in our daily life.We drink water every day, we use water to wash things and cook food, we also use water to make machines.People can't live without water.我们都知道水对于日常生活的重要性。我们每天喝水，用水洗东西和烹制食物，我们还用水来制造机器。离开水，人类就无法存活。

Though about 75% of the earth is covered with water, only 3% of it is water.So we must save water by having a instead of a.We can save water by

taps immediately and we can also save water by not washing under a running.虽然地球75%都被水覆盖，但其中只有3%是淡水。所以我们应该用淋浴代替泡澡来节约水，同时及时修好滴水的水龙头，并且不要开着水龙头洗东西。

中考英语作文范例：学会互助

编辑点评：人与人之间是和谐共处的，也是要互相帮助的，如何就这一话题展开叙述，让你的作文拿高分呢？一起来看看今天的范文是怎么写的吧，注意文中的用词和结构哦。Everyone Needs Help Did you get any help from others? 2 Did you give any help to people when they needed? 3 Tell your story 参考作文

In our daily life, we are with different kinds of people, no matter at home, in school, or at some other places.Everyone needs help, I think.And only who are willing to help others will also be helped.在我们的日常生活中我们会遇到各种各样的人，无论是在家里、学校，还是在其他地方，我觉得我们都需要帮助。并且只有那些愿意帮助他人的人会获得别人的帮助。

One day I saw a little girl in the street carrying a heavy schoolbag on her back.She was walking happily.一天，我在街上看到一个背着沉重书包的小女孩，她正开心地走着。

Then suddenly an old man fell down while he was crossing a street.She ran towards him at once, but she was too short to help him to stand.I helped her and we together brought the old man to safety.He thanked us over and over.I think the little girl was, though very young, a very person.突然，一位老人在穿过街道时摔倒了。她迅速地奔向老人，但是她太矮了，没法把老人扶起来。我过去帮助她把老人扶到安全地带。老人一再感谢我们。我觉得这个小女孩虽然年轻，但是一个很热心肠的人。

中考英语作文范例：毕业离校

编辑点评：前面我们提供了各种类型的中考英语作文范例，不知道大家掌握了其中的写法没有呢？从这期开始，我们为大家精选了一些写作参考题目和写作纲要，供大家练习。Write a passage of at least 60 words on the following topic according to the given information.Leaving School Old school life 2 Teacher(s)and schoolmate(s)3 Future plan 参考作文

I don't want to leave school, because my old school life was full of fun and I had many good friends in my old school.我不想毕业，因为我的校园生活丰富多彩，我在学校有很多好朋友。

We used to share our lunch together.We used to play ball games together.We often did some during the holiday.All of my teachers and are very friendly and helpful.Now I have to leave school, I hope I will keep in touch with them and my new school life will be more.我们曾一起共享午餐，也曾一起做球类运动，我们还经常在假日里一起做调查。所有的老师和同学都很友善，并给予帮助。现在我即将毕业，我希望能和他们保持联系，也希望新的学校生活能更加有趣。

第三篇：英语四级作文点评及

Nothing Succeeds without a Strong Will.四级写作考题出炉了。看到考题，我们眼前又是一亮：这不是新东方四级写作教材必背范文第13篇The Way to Success 的翻版吗！

这已经不是第一次了。

如果说以前这种情况颇为“偶然”，近年这种“命中考题”的情况似乎不再鲜见、渐渐变成“必然”了。2003年四、六级写作共用的题目Honesty Is the Best Policy就是我们教材必背范文第3篇Honesty；08年6月四级考题“大学生休闲娱乐的方式”和我们必背范文第12篇Ways of Relaxing 非常相近；08年12月考题Disposable Plastic Bags 是我们考前预测的重点；09年12月考题“创建绿色校园”和我们必背范文第9篇Make Our Cities Greener 非常接近，只要把city 改成campus 就可以了。

当然，猜题押题不是我们的宗旨。我们更重视的是如何培养学生的写作能力传授写作技巧。

一般来说，文章的主体段落展开方式不外乎因果分析和举例说明。今年的考题与以往很多“现象类”或“争议类”考题不同，要求评述一句格言，这和03年Honesty 非常相似。对这种文章，因果分析比较牵强。那么我们主要就依靠举例说明了。在我们的教材范文中就举了两个例子，一为孙中山依靠坚强的意志创建中华民国，二为苏秦刺股挑灯夜读。

其实考生只要掌握了方法，随便举一两个自己生活中的例子。只要文字表达顺畅，就是一篇好文章。

碰到熟悉的考题固然欣喜；碰到陌生的考题学会自如应对才是制胜的法则。

附教材范文：

Everyone tries to achieve success in his career.However, someone firmly attains his goal while another fails.Why? The one continues his cause to the end through long periods of hard struggling, but the other is easily disappointed or stops halfway.Strong will, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success.A man of strong will and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit.He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.Dr.Sun Yat-sen was such a man.Many of his attempts failed, but he held to his purpose with firmness and finally succeeded in overthrowing the Qing Dynasty.Diligence means steadiness in one’s work and study.Su Qin stabbed himself in order to keep himself attentive to studies.Marx often worked 15 hours a day.Life is short and we have many things to do.Without diligence no one can achieve anything.I believe that where there is a will there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can suffer long years of patient toil and constant efforts.

第四篇：英语作文点评

I Have a Dream 信阳市第三职业高级中学三（3）班

孙鹏丽

Almost every student has a colorful dream , so do I.I want to be a wealth①

women.Perhaps you will be surprised at my dream.I want to explain something about it.My hometown it so poor that many young people have to leave home to make a living in big cities , leaving their children alone at home.That is not good to them.For lack of their parents’ take care② , some of them become shy and awkward③,and some

even become criminals.Therefore , if I can become a successful woman , I will set up my own company and many factories in my hometown.Then our villagers can get a job and steady income.At that time , they can live a happy life with their families , and avoid leaving home and the pide④

from their children.If that’s the case , my hometown will become beautiful and prosperous.As far as I’m concerned , only having a dream is not enough , in order to realize my dream , I will be sure to seize every minute to study hard to make a good base to enter the society , for my dream , for my hometown and for my motherland.点评：

1﹑妙语锦囊: be surprised at...对„„感到意外； so...that...如此„„以致„„ ；make a living谟生；leave...alone把某人独自留下；set up建立；live a happy life过幸福的生活；in order to...为了„„；make a good base打好基础。

2、亮点展示：文章的篇幅不长，却给人以跌宕起伏之感。这是因为小作者对文章的结构进行了精心的设计，并铺以关键性的过渡词。如：perhaps you...或许你会„„；therefore因此；if that’s the case如果那样的话；as far as I’m concerned就我而言。

3、不足之处：①wealth是名词，应换成形容词wealthy。②take care是短语动词，应将take去掉，保留名词care。③此处应是误用：awkward是指“笨拙，不熟练”，作者想表达的应该是“害羞胆小”所以用cowardly。④pide作名词时，不是“分离”，而是“分水岭”的意思，故应换成separation。

4、总 结：“文章情真”，小作者以细腻的笔调写出了自己对梦想的追求。对文章的结构，小作者也进行了精心的安排，给人以跌宕起伏之感。更为可贵的是：小作者能从身边所观察到的现象引出了“留守儿童”这一敏感话题，叫人深思。作为一篇课堂命题作文，小作者能在有限的时间里写出这样的文章，实属难得。

指导教师：刘凤

第五篇：英语作文例文点评88篇

借鉴和模仿是提高写作的基石。先借来再转为自用是巧学者之法。内容可适用于读写任务正文部分。

--Miss.Q 英语作文例文点评88篇（收集于网络）【要求】

英语课上老师教给同学们一句英语格言“No Pains, No Gains”（不劳则不获），并让大家围绕如下三方面以这句格言为题写一篇短文。

人们在困难面前容易气馁，并产生不劳而获的想法。

“不劳则不获”这一格言能给予人鼓励。

学生要取得优异成绩离不开苦功夫，所谓成功的秘诀即是辛勤的劳动。

【范文】

No Pains, No Gains

People attempting a task may be discouraged in front of difficulties.They start with a great interest and passion.When they find that the task will take much more effort than they thought, their interest diminishes and their passion wanes.At that time, they are likely to have the idea of reaping a good harvest without much labor.The old saying “No pains, no gains” comes as a word of cheer to these discouraged persons.No task that is really worth doing can be done either easily or quickly.No mastery of any knowledge or skill can be gained without painstaking efforts.We students shoulder the task of learning knowledge that calls for exertion.To improve our grades is what every student wants.We may envy those who have achieved excellence, and wonder what makes them succeed.In fact, their secret of success is no secret.It depends largely on their efforts.Good grades only belong to hardworking students.Many thanks for the favor you did for me!【评语】

该文紧紧围绕题目给出的三方面加以论述，层次清楚，语言流畅易懂。“interest diminishes and their passion wanes” 中词语搭配讲究，“reaping a good harvest without much labor” 用另一个习惯表达法点出了“No Pains, No Gains”的含义，同时又避免了重复。文章句式灵活，长短搭配得当，使文章朗朗上口，虽然是议论文，但却没有枯燥之感。

【要求】

根据下面的提示写一篇短文，内容须包括下面几个要点。

没有坚强的意志就不可能取得成功。

事业成功须非凡的干劲。

有些人害怕困难，则一事无成。

【范文】

Where there is a Will, There is a Way

No man can win success without strong will.We hear some men have got good results, but hardly realize that the great men had been making more efforts before they achieved success.Success requires an unusual amount of energy to overcome difficulties.So it is important for us to have great resolution.Some men tend to be afraid of difficulties.If they meet with some difficulties, they will give in.So they get nothing eventually.So let's make up our minds, stick to it and surely win success in our career.Focus on the most important things to do to help your organization be successful.Don't focus on the easiest things.【评语】

对这种提纲式作文，一定要囊括所给提纲中的全部内容，但又无须拘泥于提纲，更不能逐字逐句地“翻译”。对此应发挥自己的想像力和创造力，大胆地创作扩展。

【要求】

很多人都希望能在事业上有所成就，但不是所有人都能取得胜利。成功需要顽强的意志，锲而不舍的努力，勤奋学习的精神。请你以此为主要内容，准备一篇百字左右的简短发言。

【范文】

The way to success

Everyone tries to achieve success in his/her career.But some finally attain their aims while others fail.Why? Some continue their cause to the end through long period of hard struggles, but others are easily disappointed and stop halfway.Strong will, perseverance and diligence are the three essentials of success.A man of strong will and perseverance always has an inflexible spirit.He sticks to his cause no matter how tough it might be.Life is short and we have too much to do.Without diligence no one can achieve anything.I believe that where there is a will there is a way, and that success belongs to those who can make constant efforts.Don't be afraid of life.Believe that life is worth living, and your belief will help create the fact.【评语】

这是一篇议论文，作者首先提出问题，再提出自己观点：意志坚强、锲而不舍、勤奋，是成功的三大要素。作者在结尾，巧妙地运用了谚语“where there is a will there is a way”，使文章增色不少。

【要求】

坚强的意志(Man's Strong Will)请以下面三句分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以坚强的意志为题的文章。

Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality.There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will.It is not easy to cultivate a strong will.【范文】

Man's Strong Will

Strong will is universally regarded as a very praisable quality.It is neither genius nor extraordinary ability that gives us power to deal with and overcome whatever hardship that befalls.It is strong will that enables us to endure the trying situation and to attain our goals.Strong will gives us light when we are in the dark, and encouragement when we are frustrated.With this meritorious quality, no enemy can overwhelm us, and no obstacles can stand in our way.As the saying goes, where there is a will, there is a way.All pain helps to make us rise, how-ever much we may hate it at the time.There have been many examples that success can be achieved by strong will.During the Long March, the Red Army soldiers met with the greatest hardship men have ever experienced.They had nothing to eat but grass roots and barks of trees.It was their strong will that made them defeat the hardship.Helen Keller, a strong willed American blind woman, mastered the English language and became a well-known educator.Such instances abound, and suffice it just to enumerate the two.Develop a high tolerance for ambiguity----you'll be more satisfied.It is not easy to cultivate a strong will.First of all, we must set up a firm faith in our cause, namely, the cause of communism, and be ready to devote our lives to it.Secondly, we must learn from strong-willed persons, especially, from revolutionary martyrs who fought for communism to the last drop of blood.Finally, we should boldly go through trials and hardships to train our will so as to get rid of the weak points of our moral character.【评语】

本文为议论文。首段的“neither„nor„”“It is strong will that„”，和“no enemy„no obstacles„”的运用，加强了文章的语气，突出了坚强意志的重要价值。段末的格言起到了画龙点睛的作用。第二段用了红军二万五千里长征和海伦•凯勒这两个例子，有力地证明了坚强的意志能使人获得成功这一主题。末段谈如何培养坚强的意志，层次清晰，观点正确，具有说服力。

【要求】

以“Don't Stop Halfway”为题写一篇议论文。

论证具体

结构完整

字数100—150 【范文】

Don't Stop Halfway

When a man is doing some work, he desires some benefit from it.In order to get this benefit, the must do the task to the end and completely finish it.To finish a task, whether hard or not requires patience and firmness.Therefore when you have some work to do, you must do it faithfully, irrespective of the difficulty.Difficulties and obstacles are unavoidable;if you turn your back on meeting them, you will succeed in nothing, but if you can overcome them, you will accomplish something.To stop halfway is very bad.Suppose that a precious stone is at a great distance from you and you want to obtain it;you must reach for it;you must not stop halfway.If you stop halfway, you will not only get nothing, but also lose something, because your time and strength will be wasted.It is a good thing for one to do one thing at a time, and never stop halfway.Cultivate a reputation for being reliable and hardworking, even if it means bucking peer pressure.【评语】

作者对不要半途而废的论证具体而有说服力，告诉我们半途而废不仅无法达到目标而且浪费时间、精力。段落安排逐层深入，循循善诱。全文整体结构完整、自然。

【要求】

题目：Failure（失败）是一个人经常遇到的。失败不是好事，因为它使人的努力(efforts)付之东流。但是，失败也是好事，它可以教育我们使我们学到更多的东西。试写一短文就此谈谈你对失败的看法。

【范文】

Failure

Nearly everybody regards failure as a bad thing.The efforts we have made seem to be of no use and we feel very disappointed.Some people even lose the courage to start again or lose interest in life when the failure is a very great one.But failure can also benefit us.It can teach us a good lesson and make us experienced.Also, we can realize our own shortcomings and get a better knowledge of ourselves.So when we start again, we can succeed more easily.Therefore, failure not only disappoints us but also benefits us.When we fail, we should make full use of our failure and learn from our experience.Then, we may succeed in the future.Life is made up of ambiguous victories and nebulous defeats----claim them all as victories!【评语】

本文最大的优点是正反对照，条理清楚。高考作文时间很短，所以谋篇布局显得十分重要。本文脉络清楚，浅显易懂，应该说在考场中是容易取胜的。此外，本篇行文简练，显得干净利落。要求】

每个人的生活中都有过失败的经历，失败对于我们来说，到底意味着什么？请你按如下提纲写一篇文章，谈谈你对失败的理解。

失败是生活中的常事。

人们对失败的态度各不相同。

就我而言，我认为失败„

【范文】

Is Failure a Bad Thing

Failure is quite a common thing in our life.As long as we do things we will surely encounter difficulties.Of course we should try our best to get over them, but in many cases, it is not so easy, or even impossible.Then how should we face failure? Different people take different attitudes towards failure.When faced with failure, some people become frustrated and lose their selfconfidence.They refuse to make any further efforts.These people will probably never amount to anything in life.Some people just don't fear failure.They firmly believe that failure is the mother of success.As a result, not only can failure stop them, but they draw useful lessons from it and try even harder.Such people are sure to succeed someday.As for me, I don't think failure is a bad thing.Failure can never discourage me but only enrich my experience and steel my will.With this positive attitude in mind, I will try hard in anything I'm determined to accomplish and attain success in the end.【评语】

本文按题目所给纲要分为三段。首段简要地论述了失败是每个人都会遇到的，末句用了一句设问，起到了承上启下的作用。第二段谈到了人们对失败的两种典型态度，先写错误观点进行铺垫，而后再写正确观点。这种安排自然突出了作者所赞同的态度，同时为引出第三段做好的了准备。末段作者则阐明了自己的观点。全文层次清楚，段落间衔接紧密而自然，主题突出，语言流畅，用词准确。

【要求】

失败，是人人都不愿体验的结果。有人说失败使人消沉，有人说失败是成功之母。你对失败的态度怎样？写一篇短文。

字数150—200字，题目自拟。

【范文】

Is Failure a Bad Thing?

Failure is a common thing in our daily lives.As students, We sometimes fail to get high scores on our examinations.When we play game, we sometimes can't avoid losing to others.And there are times when we fail to do satisfactory work.All these failures happen naturally and almost every one of us has had such experiences.However, there are different attitudes towards failure.Some people lose heart in failure, they think the world has come to an end.Some people don't take failure seriously and just ignore it, while some others learn much from it.In my opinion, what really counts is not failure itself, but what we think of failure and do after failure.As long as we believe in ourselves and don't give up, and in the mean time learn something from our failure, We'll certainly be successful in the end.So I'm never afraid of failure, for I believe that failure is not a bad thing, but the mother of success.看问题一定要看到正反两面，体现在文中，就往往是鲜明的对比。

【评语】 表达思想清楚，内容比较充实，文字流畅，句子结构多样。第一段、第二段主题句简练而贴切，句间衔接比较自然，用词造句有不少闪光点，如：the world has come to an end 等。

要求】

请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇题为“诚实”的文章。

It is usually better to be honest than dishonest.One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience.Honesty makes you happy and gain a good reputation.【范文】

honesty

We often praise somebody because of his diligence and honesty.So all the people think that honesty is a virtue and that it is the best policy.It is usually better to be honest than dishonest.People tend to believe an honest man, no matter what he does and what he says.On the contrary, dishonest people are not trustworthy.For this reason, honest people are always more successful than the dishonest.So it is better to be honest because it can help you succeed.One of the worst things about lying is that it results in a guilty conscience.If a person tells lies, his face will turn red and his heart will beat faster.He will always live in fright.Honesty makes you happy and gains a good reputation.All people consider what you've said true and trust you just because you are an honest man.Therefore, you can say what you like and do what you like without fear.You will feel very happy.Likewise, just because of your honesty, people respect you and love you.Gradually, you will gain a good reputation.To be honest will ensure you a happy life.【评语】

该文内容切题，详略安排得当，重点放在诚实的益处，即第二段和第四段上。这两段的段末均有一句总结句与段首的主题句相呼应，使段落结构完整，同时强化了主题。文章语言略显单调，但比较顺畅，表达也较清楚。

【要求】

班会课上要求同学们为大家用英文讲述一个小哲理，要求条理清晰，有自己的见解。你的发言稿内容如下：

真诚是一种重要的思想方法。

应该弄清楚什么是真诚。

为什么有时人们难以做到真诚。

真诚，是一种人生态度。

【范文】

On the Truth

Truth is an attitude of the mind.It is important, if one does not wish to inconvenience and bore his or her friends.It means telling no lies and never backing out of one's word.But it is more important to know what is the truth, and not to slide into those untruthful habits of thought which are so pleasant and so easy.There is a word named “the victory habit of mind”.People who have this mind are unduly preoccupied by what was socially and morally convenient.One should have the courage to think uncomfortably, since it is only by rejecting the convenience that one can come to think the truth.Truth, is an attitude of the life.直线式思维，层层推进是英文的习惯。避免Chinglish不仅仅要防止出错，还要培养语感和思路。

【评语】

这篇短文首尾照应，用同一句式，只换了一个单词：“mind”、“life”，却把意思推进了一层，很符合英文的习惯，能起到警人的效果。能够不停地把意思深入，也是这篇短的一个特点。它使用的是层层推进的办法，没有在每个点上展开论述，但却显得乏味。

【要求】

题目：自信

请指明什么是自信，并阐明自信的重要性。

【范文】

Self-confidence

Self-confidence means trust in one's own ability.As a very important psychological quality, it brings your creative power to play, arouses you enthusiasm for work and helps you overcome difficulties.When asked of the secret of her success, Marie Curie answered, “My success lies in perseverance and self-confidence, the latter in particular.”

Self-confidence gives you light when you are in dark and encouragement when you are dismayed.It is self-confidence that inspires you to cope with any arduous task.With self-confidence, the goal you intend can be reached, and so can the hard nut be cracked.Some people find most of the things impossible, saying, “It is beyond my ability to do the task.” or “I am not cut out for it.” In many cases, these are only lame excuses.When our heart is void of self-confidence, every hope is gone, and everything we are laying our hands on is spoilt.Be honest with yourself about your strengths and weakness and manage accordingly.【评语】

本文为议论文，分三部分层层深入地论述了自信心这一可贵的心理素质。首段在给自信心作出简要解释后，接着阐明了自信心的重要性。段末恰到好处地引用了居里夫人的话来支持自己的论点。第二段进一步陈述了自信心的重要性。而在末段作者首先通过两句话生动地表现出了缺乏自信心人的心态，而后从反而指出如果缺乏自信心，则会一事无成。

【要求】

ambition的意思是我们的生活目标，是对成功、权力、财富等等的强烈渴望。ambition并不意味着要成为最好的，它是一种激励我们向前的目标，使我们不因失败而失去希望。每个人都有自己的ambition，但不是每个人都能实现自己的渴望。结合以上内容，以“Ambition”为题写一篇议论文。

不要逐字逐句翻译。

字数100字左右。

【范文】

Ambition

Our ambition means the goal we have in our life.It is a strong desire for success, power, riches, and so on.To have ambition doesn't necessarily mean one wants to be number one.This is not the real sense of the word.True ambition is the goal that encourages us to look forward and not to lose hope because of failure.Ambition differs from person to person and everyone has his or her own ambition.Yet not every-one of us can succeed in what we desire to do.Live all you can.It's a mistake not to.The right time is any time, that one is still so lucky as to live.【评语】

本文充分表达了题目的要求，思路清晰，结构完整，内容简明扼要。语句活泼流利，用词直接精当，避免了华丽浮夸的词藻或含义模糊的语句。紧扣题意，中心明确，是一篇成功的议论文。结尾处引用格言更显出深厚的语言功底，为全文增色不少。

【要求】

文明礼貌(Good Manners)请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以文明礼貌为题的文章。

People all over the world set great regard on good manners.There are good manners in which we behave in public places.If everyone has developed good manners…

【范文】

Good Manners

People all over the world set great regard on good manners.To a certain degree, good manners indicate a person's good education and breeding.In schools, it is part of students' moral trailing to develop good manners.A person with good manners always wins praise.On the contrary, people will frown on him if he behaves roughly and impolitely.There are good manners in which we behave in public places.It is a good manner to offer help to the young, the old and the handicapped when they are in need of it.So is it to behave politely and keep away from foul language.Besides, we should guard against such minor offenses as making a loud noise, casting peels and shells, smoking and spitting.If everyone has developed good manners, people will from a more harmonious relationship.If everyone behaves considerately towards others and follows the social ethics, people will live in a better world.With the general mood of society improved, there will be a progress of civilization.【评语】

本文按照题目所给的纲要从三方面论述了文明礼貌的重要性。意思明晰，文理通顺。“frown on”，“keep away from”，“guard against”，“minor offenses”等小词用得准确自然，很好地传达了作者的意思。

要求】

在现代社会，请你谈一谈对礼貌的看法。

字数100—150字

【范文】

Politeness

Politeness means good behavior in social intercourse.Codes of politeness may differ from country to country.But the object is always to add pleasure and grace to daily life.A polite person is always an agreeable companion.He is agreeable because he is always thinking of others before himself.He doesn't interrupt people when they are talking.He is careful not to say anything to hurt other people's feelings.He doesn't push in a crowd, but waits quietly until it is his turn to pass.In addition, by acting in accordance with the prevailing customs, he is considered a member of the civilized society;otherwise, he is looked upon as a fool and will be avoided by people of high breeding.Politeness is truly a valuable asset.If you are courteous to other people, you have good manners and your everday life will be much happier.【评语】

论点鲜明。文章开头即表明作者观点，接着围绕这一观点以第三人称娓娓道来，给人以中肯无惑之感。全文运笔流畅，论证充分。读后给人以深刻印象。

【要求】

古今中外有很多关于人生问题的讨论，这方面的精彩英语文章也数不胜数。现在有一个英语杂志想开辟一个讨论人生的小专栏，要求语句精练警人，观点有新义。你的应征文章内容如下：

生命中的快乐是人们所不断寻求的。

但是我们往往忽视身边的快乐，而去寻找那些所谓大的野心勃勃的东西。

快乐无所不在。

想一想身边有哪些可珍惜的快乐呢。

【范文】

The Happiness of the Life

Life is like a winding path that surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit, but many of us spend much time looking for happiness around the next corner.We do not bend to enjoy the happiness that is ours for the taking just at out feet.In our desire to reach the “pot of gold”, complete and lasting happiness we all want to fill our lives, we ignore things which don't seem worthy of such a large ambition, or which can't give us the whole thing all at once.Happiness is all around us, but it often comes in small grains.When we gather it grain by grain, we soon have a basketful.What small pieces of happiness surround me right now? Most folks are about as happy as they make up their minds to be.【评语】

该文按要求描写了自己是如何看待生活中快乐的。语言很清新，几个比喻用得很有特色：比如把“life”比做“a winding path surrounded by flowers, butterflies, and delicious fruit”，把收集生活中的快乐比做“gather grain”。既生动又形象。最后的疑问句也起到了发人深省的效果。

【要求】

人人都渴望幸福，但对幸福的理解却不尽相同：有人追逐金钱，有人看重名誉，有人渴望友情，有人视爱情为人生的崇高追求。你呢？写下你对幸福的看法。

字数：100左右。

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Happiness

Happiness means different things to different people.For example some people believe that if they have a lot of money or many material things, they will be happy.They believe that if they are wealthy, they will be able to do everything they want, and so they will be happy.On the other hand, some people believe that money is not the only source of happiness.These people value their intelligence, or their health, or their religion;these things make them happy, For me, happiness is closely tied to my family.I am happy if my father and my mother live in harmony.When all the members of my family share the good time and the bad, I am happy.Although the definition of happiness depends on the inpidual, my “wealth” of happiness is my family.Remember this,----that very little is needed to make a happy life.【评语】

作者首先列出不同人对幸福的不同理解，然后引出作者本人对幸福的观点—“closely tied to my family”尤其“I'm happy if my father and mother live in harmony”读来令人感动。全篇行文流畅，结构严谨，首尾呼应。

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社会的变化引起人们对富有与欢乐的讨论。人们开始认为富有与欢乐并非必然相联系，穷人一样有他们的欢乐。你会在富有与欢乐之间作出什么选择？请你就常人的看法和你自己的看法写简短文。

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Wealthy and Happy

Wealth and happiness are not necessarily related to each other.First of all, we have to believe that wealthy people are more likely to be happy than poor ones.Because wealthy people do not have to worry about their work and bread, which are usually the causes of trouble to the poor.But in this world, happiness does not belong to the rich only.The poor have an equal right to it.So long as the poor are satisfied with themselves and their condition, they feel happy.I think it would be perfect to be both wealthy and happy.But if the two can not be held at the same time, I would rather choose happiness.Money may be the husk of many things, but not the kernel.【评语】

富有与欢乐是一个赋有哲学意义的问题：一个是物质条件，一个是心理感觉。不同的人应该允许有不同的看法。本文开篇阐述了常人的观点，按着从正、反两个方面辩证阐述二者的关系，最后阐明自己的观点，显得说理充分，让人信服。写这类主观性题目，个人观点必须明确。

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题目：How to Approach Money。请根据以下提示作文，要求以三句话作为段首语结构文章。

Money is necessary in our modern life.But money is not all good.How should we approach money.【范文】

How to Approach Money

Money is necessary in our modern life.We need money to buy things such as food and clothing.When we go out, we should pay traffic fee and other fees.In a word, money is important.With more money, we can live better and create better working or studying conditions.But money is not always good.Many people work hard when they have no money but do nothing when they have more than enough money, And even worse, there are some people nowadays who make money at the expense of friendship or other people's interests.How should we approach money, then? In my opinion, we should work hard to earn more money, But at the same time, we must remember that money is not our final goal.一定要把握好“度”哦，不要离topic sentence太远。

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本文为一给起首句的作文，所以内容限制很大，个人发挥余地较小。本文优点在于简练地评论了金钱的利与弊，逻辑清楚。此类文章写作起来比较容易。

【要求】

请以下面三句话分别作为三段段首的主题句，写一篇以健康、美貌和学识为题的文章。

Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.【范文】

Health, Beauty and Knowledge

Young people look forward to being strong and handsome.They take part in rigorous training to build up their body.They take some gymnastics stars as their models, whose welldeveloped muscles or proportioned figure is the combination of strength and grace, and also the indication of youthfulness and vitality.There are women who set great store by the beauty of outward appearance.They dress themselves in clothes of the latest fashion.They apply a heavy make-up, rouging their lips, powdering their faces, painting their brows, and wearing earrings and necklaces.To compensate the inadequacy of their natural beauty, some goes so far as to receive the operation of face mending.文体和文风也是应该注意的。文体比较郑重。

Health and beauty without knowledge is almost equal to a body without soul.A person with a stout body alone can go nowhere in the modern age of science and technology, a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.It is true that health and beauty are something one may well be proud of.But it is of greater importance for a student to master adequate knowledge that is useful in his life-long service to the country.句子相应规整一些，用词也尽量正式，以免出现不得当的笑话。

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全文围绕三个主题句展开议论，条理清楚，层次分明，用词准确。“well-developed muscles”，“proportioned figure”，“apply make-up”，“rouging lips”，“powdering faces”，“painting brows”，及“wearing earrings and necklaces”等词语搭配讲究，生动地表达了作者的意思。“a person's outward beauty is as easy to fade as a flower to wither no matter how colorful it is.”比喻句用得贴切自然，很好地强调了主题。

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健康是革命的本钱，请以“health”为题目写篇100单词的英语小短文。每段的中心句已经给出：

Health is the foundation of one's future success.What should we do to maintain and enhance our health? Health is more important than wealth.【范文】

Health

It is clear that health is the foundation of one's future success.If you become sick, it is nearly impossible to pursue your career effectively.On the other hand, if you are strong, you can go all out to overcome the obstacles that lie ahead of you.Now that we know that health is the source of our energy, what should we do to maintain and enhance our health? First, we should exercise every day to strengthen our muscles.Second, we should keep regular hours of our lives.If we get up early, we can breathe fresh air and see the sunrise, and this habit can do wonders for our outlook on life.Third, there is a proverb that says, “Prevention is better than cure.”

In conclusion, health is more important than wealth.Those who are rich but lose their health are no more fortunate than those who are poor.If you want your wish to come true, health is the most important ingredient of your success.【评语】

该文为行云流水，结构清楚而紧凑。开篇说明健康的重要性。在第二段里，分了三个层次来阐释“健康是我们能量的源泉”，而且还有提问句来引导下面的回答。最后一段，“in conclusion”，总结了全文，而且有所提高。

Understand your health benefits and keep track of them.【要求】

题目：减肥。请根据以下要点写一短文，谈谈你对减肥的看法。

节食（diet.n.）与慢跑（jogging）是两种效果不同的减肥方法。

慢跑经济而有效；节食效果不佳。

减肥如走极端则很危险。

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Losing Weight

Many fat people want to lose weight and to be younger and slimmer.They often choose two ways----diet and jogging.Their effects are different.Jogging is the easiest and cheapest way of shaping the body.For the price of a good pair of running shoes, anyone can join the race anywhere.Dieting, too, has become a common way.People eat very little everyday, and the food they eat cannot supply as much nutrition as the body needs.Both jogging and dieting, carried to extremes, can be harmful.Above all, common sense should be the keystone for any dieting and exercise scheme.It is true that the principal part of beauty lies in decent motion.【评语】

这是一篇有提示语的作用文，因此，一般要求在文章的段首以中心句的形式点明要点。另外，提示性的作用，切忌主观修改提示要求。议论文的优点就在于紧扣提示，层层展开，干净利落，正反相称，使文章显得公允、完整。

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“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这句家喻户晓的格言指出了谦虚这一美德的重要性。请你围绕这句格言写一篇短文谈谈你对谦虚的理解。

人各有所长，因此可能会自视过高。例如老年人可能看不起年轻人，认为年轻人短少智慧和阅历；而年轻人也会轻视老人，认为他们缺少活力。重要的是，要谦虚地学习别人的长处。

学习知识也离不开谦虚。一个谦虚的人会不耻下问，因为他知道，知识的海洋如此浩瀚，一个人在一生中能学到的只是沧海一粟。反之，一个自负的人则炫耀自己的一知半解，不再进取。谦虚的人对知识的追求是无止境的，这正是他能取得成功的原因所在。

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Modesty

“Modesty helps one progress, and pride makes one lag behind.”Celebrating the virtue of modesty, The saying becomes many people's motto.Everyone has his strong points, of which he may have too high an opinion.For example, the old may look down upon the young, thinking that young persons lack wisdom and experience;the young may despise the old, taking pride in their vigor.The important thing is to be modest and to learn from other people's strong points.Modesty is important in learning.A modest person never hesitates to consult those who are inferior to him.He understands that the range of knowledge is as vast as the sea and one can only gain a drop all his life.In contrast, a conceited person, while having only a smattering of knowledge, shows it off and dissatisfied with what he has achieved.As a modest person's thirst for knowledge is never satisfied, the road to success lies before him.【评语】

文章以“虚心使人进步，骄傲使人落后”这一格言开头，从“人各有所长，应虚心取人所长”和“谦虚对求学至关重要”两方面论述了谦虚这一主题，最后得出结论“虚心的人能够走向成功”。层次清楚，措辞准确。文中将知识与大海作比喻句贴切自然，没有牵强附会之感。文中一些习语的熟练运用，也显示出了作者良好的文字功底。

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题目：爱是人类普遍而伟大的感情，请以“love”为题，写一篇100单词左右的英语小短文。文章每一段的前一句话已经给出。

Love plays an important part in this world today.The love between you and your parents is a specials love.There are other kinds of love.【范文】

Love

Love plays an important part in this world today.With the increasing modernization of society, relationship between people are becoming looser and looser.It is difficult to imagine what they would be like if there were no love for each other.Love is the caring and concern for, and understanding of other people and the acceptance of their strength and weaknesses.To love and to be loved is the true happiness in life.The love between you and your parents is a special one.This love, as any other sincere love, must be honest and be shared by both parents and children.The love of parents is a great support in their children's lives.It will remain with them and help them overcome all the difficulties and make them feel secure.There are other kinds of love.Love between friends, partners, human beings and animals.The power of love makes us endure the difficulties in our lives, even though we may not have the chance to think about it, it maybe be kept alive deeply in our heart.【评语】该文逻辑清晰，词语简练，先从“爱”的普遍意义谈起，说到“爱”的含义，“爱”对我们的重要。在第二段里又重点地谈了谈父母和孩子之间的“爱”，然后结尾处点到了其他种类的“爱”。有序有节，完整精干。

并不是好文章必须追求艰涩的词语，平易的语言只要运用得当，也会有极好的效果。

【要求】

本市无偿献血日即将来到。在学校的无偿献血动员活动中，你应《英语园地》之邀，写一篇宣传稿，向包括留学生及外籍教员在内的全校师生宣传无偿献血的重大意义及其对身体的影响。大意如下：

血液是人体不可缺少的东西。它将养分和氧气输送体内各给组织，同时将废物和二氧化碳运走。一个人如果失血过多就会死亡。输血这一措施正在挽救着千百万人的生命。没有丰富的血库，也就无所谓现代医学的发展。

无偿献血是高尚之举，它体现了献血者对他人的关爱。目前，献血活动在许多国家都广泛开展，它在我国也得到提倡。

献血不会损害献血者的健康。首先，只有健康的人才有资格献血；此外，每次的献血量很少，献血者的身体会很快进行调整，使身体机制正常运行。

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Blood Donation Without payment

Blood is vital to the human body.It carries nourishment and oxygen to tissues, and at the same time, removes wastes and carbon dioxide.A person will die if he loses too much blood.Nowadays blood transfusion is saving millions of dying people.Without an adequate store of blood, the modern medicine can't develop.Blood donation doesn't harm the donator's health.First, only healthy people are allowed to donate blood;besides, every time, only a small amount of blood is taken from the donator.His body will make a quick adjustment to allow the body to operate normally.【评语】

文章从血液对人体的重要性和献血对人体的影响两方面对无偿献血活动进行了论述。每段句首为主题句，使整篇文章结构清晰。行文流畅，用词准确。句式虽略显简单，但“carry, remove, make an adjustment”等词语的恰当使用，使文章呈现出一定的变化。

We may miss the point of life by being too important.【要求】

人类每时每刻都在浪费着各种各样的资源，不仅包括自然资源，还包括时间资源。请你以下面三句话分别作为段首主题句，写一篇短文谈谈浪费问题。

Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day.The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time.It is time to call for an end to waste.【范文】

Mankind is wasting things everywhere and every day.Wherever we turn, we can see that paper, bottles and cans are thrown away;food is wasted just because of its poor taste;clothes are discarded simply due to their old fashion.Not only things and money are wasted, but natural resources are abused as well.Trees are cut down merely for fuel;wildlife is killed simply for food;oil, coal and minerals are exploited in a bad way.The worst example of man's waste is the waste of time.Many people tend to spend their time on worthless things, such as wandering about in the street, gossiping in the office, or sleeping too much during the day.As we know, time is so precious to us that it passes by and never returns.The waste of time amounts to the waste of life.It is time to call for an end to waste.On the one hand, we must save natural resources and make full use of them;otherwise human beings will be faced with the scarcity of natural r